Talk:End Of Days : When Worlds Collide/@comment-71.223.10.193-20131216045025

Hello, you don't know me, but I have to say that your story so far is amazing, and well put together. But as a fellow fanfiction writer I have to kinda critcize, please don't take this the wrong way; I just want to help someone who seems to really love writing down what he creates in his mind.

Your writing style is good, but it leaves a lot to be desired, your wording is a little sloopy, as I was reading I had to constantly go back and re-read what you had written. I mean even some of your sentences made no sense, I am so not trying to be nitpicky right now, but it's the writer in me. Editing would help you in so many areas, and I just wanted to encourage you to continue to write, but to also go back after writing such an intense scene and go, "Did what I just write match with what I just put down or does in need some polishing?"

Don't be afraid to go back and re-read something again and again, and make sure what you have written down matches with what is going on in you mind. It helpes your readers so very much. So please, if you need help I would be more than excited to help, (since I am a fan of your work so far), if not that's okay too. You can contact me in the link below if you ever want to drop a line. -Stray.

http://straydg5.blogspot.com/